Deviant Login Shop  Join deviantART for FREE Take the Tour
×

:iconjdwate: More from jdwate


More from deviantART



Details

Submitted on
May 21, 2013
Submitted with
Sta.sh Writer
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
760
Favourites
88 (who?)
Comments
17

License

Creative Commons License
Some rights reserved. This work is licensed under a
Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-No Derivative Works 3.0 License.
×
Eat.
    Don't eat.
Take it easy.
        Work out until you pass out.
Get help.Tell someone.
            Keep it a secret. It's only for you and me.
You're perfect.
                You're worthless.
You're beautiful.
                    You're disgusting.
Why won't you listen?
                        They don't understand.
Let me help you.
                            You don't understand.
Show me.
                                No!
I love you..
                                    You hate me.
Forget it.
                                        See.
I'm leaving.
                                            I told you.
"...."
                                                 I'm alone..
Logic has been defeated.
Add a Comment:
 
:icontsubaki-nanaser08:
wow! this poem sounds very familiar to me. 
Reply
:icondontletgo19:
DontLetGo19 Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Simply Amazing.
Reply
:iconkronos-kirbi:
kronos-kirbi May 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Like me
Reply
:iconezmurelda:
Lovely. And sadly so true for many people. I've gone trough something like this. I relate.
Great work.
Reply
:icontlupis:
beutiiful...
Reply
:iconshawnthewolf12:
i agree. very well played.
Reply
:iconif-cloud-was-a-girl:
If-Cloud-Was-A-Girl May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This really hits home. The battle that lies hidden, even the closest people to your heart can't see...
This has impact. Well done.
Reply
:iconanythingbtordinary:
AnythingBtOrdinary May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love it! I feel like this can apply to anyone struggling with a battle in the mind, although I can see that its specifically about someone with an eating disorder.
Reply
:icondanskiconti:
DanskiConti May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very good :)
I hope that because you have identified the lack of logic you are not falling for the tricks your mind plays.

The structure really fits the poem well, the lines move as the negative comments depart further from sensibility.
Reply
Add a Comment: