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Eat.
    Don't eat.
Take it easy.
        Work out until you pass out.
Get help.Tell someone.
            Keep it a secret. It's only for you and me.
You're perfect.
                You're worthless.
You're beautiful.
                    You're disgusting.
Why won't you listen?
                        They don't understand.
Let me help you.
                            You don't understand.
Show me.
                                No!
I love you..
                                    You hate me.
Forget it.
                                        See.
I'm leaving.
                                            I told you.
"...."
                                                 I'm alone..
Logic has been defeated.
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tsubaki-nanaseR08 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013   Artist
wow! this poem sounds very familiar to me. 
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DontLetGo19 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Simply Amazing.
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kronos-kirbi Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Like me
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ezmurelda Featured By Owner May 28, 2013
Lovely. And sadly so true for many people. I've gone trough something like this. I relate.
Great work.
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XxScarletNightxX Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
I can relate
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tlupis Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
beutiiful...
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shawnthewolf12 Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
i agree. very well played.
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If-Cloud-Was-A-Girl Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This really hits home. The battle that lies hidden, even the closest people to your heart can't see...
This has impact. Well done.
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AnythingBtOrdinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love it! I feel like this can apply to anyone struggling with a battle in the mind, although I can see that its specifically about someone with an eating disorder.
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DanskiConti Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very good :)
I hope that because you have identified the lack of logic you are not falling for the tricks your mind plays.

The structure really fits the poem well, the lines move as the negative comments depart further from sensibility.
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punkieditions Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Student General Artist
is sensational. I love it, one thing, is novel or just that? and what I can adapt it to Spanish? please. If you do not want, no matter c:
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UltimateLazerbot Featured By Owner May 24, 2013   Digital Artist
logic has been defeated lol
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Furrylover6801 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wonderful Job!
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MandyKabandy Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You really brought out the emotions in your format and style of writing! I was able to completely relate! Great job!
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IsaacNixon Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I saw this whilst trawling through what's new on deviantart, and I don't normally comment on anything, but this reminded me of something I read recently in a fantastic book called "Living With A Creative Mind". In that book it talks about the duality of a creative person's mentality and how we exist at both ends of the emotional spectrum. This is commonly misdiagnosed as bipolar when it is actually one of the very tools we use to create.
The ego means we can create confidently and the humility means we can change and adapt, meaning we can both make good things and continue to develop. If you ever get the chance, you should check it out, I personally found it very useful when trying to understand how I worked.
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I feel like that sometimes. A part of me says something while the other part of me says something different.
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BelleMaske Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, nice work. I like how the italicized lines get further and further away as if alienating themselves. I hope this is just fiction, and not something you really struggle with. But if you do, you're not alone, and you're not worthless.
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